Friday, December 12, 2014

Sixth Hour Personal Essay Rubric


An effective personal essay includes:
The writer’s voice
An attention grabbing intro
Proper use of grammar and usage and mechanics
Maybe the writer’s own personal experiences
A clear and engaging message, but also complex exploration of ideas
Lucid organization of ideas
Use of figurative language: simile, metaphor, personification, description
Clear and purposeful syntax
Connections to multiple and varied examples
An organic structure that is dependent upon purpose, content, writer and message
Effective transitions
1,000 word minimum







Fourth Hour Personal Essay Rubric


An essay that receives an “A” will include all of the following:
Evidence of effort, time, and energy
Evidence of the writer’s authentic voice
Evidence of the writer’s knowledge about the topic.
Ideas that lead logically to a complex message.
The effective use of rhetorical devices:  Allusions, simile, metaphor, personification, rhetorical questions, etc.
Many varied and relevant examples.
A clear and effective and organic pattern of organization and structure.
Proper MLA format
Proper grammar, usage and mechanics
1000 words

Effective transitions

Third Hour Personal Essay Rubric


An essay that receives a grade of “A” will include the following:
A clear message
Evidence of the writer’s engagement with the topic
Evidence of the writer’s authentic voice
A combination of “showing” and “telling” through the use of real and/or hypothetical examples
Relevant examples
Content that is thought provoking
Precise word choice (rhetorical specificity)
The characteristics of a personal essay v. a book report
Clear and effective and purposeful syntax
Strong diction
Effective transitions
An effective and organic organization and structure
MLA Format/no spelling errors
The effective use of rhetorical strategies: simile, metaphor, parallel structure, personification, repetition, rhetorical questions

1,000 word minimum

First Hour Personal Essay "Rubric"

An effective personal essay will include the following:

The use of outside and varied examples
A clear and engaging message
Typed/MLA Format
The writer’s authentic voice 
A structure that is organic and appropriate to the content and purpose (avoid the 5 P/ 3 pronged thesis)
Full development of original ideas
A fresh and original approach with fresh and original language (avoid cliche)
Transitions between ideas
Effective use of rhetorical devices: simile, metaphor, repetition, rhetorical questions, other types of figurative language
Varied and appropriate vocabulary
1,000 words



Make it good.


Thursday, December 4, 2014

The Personal Essay Frequently Asked Questions

Many students have been asking for more concrete direction regarding the personal essay.  I put together a document that answers frequently asked questions. I hope it helps.  Let me know if you have any questions.

https://drive.google.com/a/fhps.net/file/d/0B0ndMsFKkNibcTNOenc1V1RNY0lwZFlFMm55MTQwU2NQdkl3/view?usp=sharing

Also, I found the following to be a very useful article about the creative process and visualizing the personal essay informative: https://www.creativenonfiction.org/online-reading/picturing-personal-essay-visual-guide.

You can find many of the personal essays referenced in the above article on-line.

 Like here: http://www.psych.utah.edu/psych4130/Berry_W.pdf

And here: http://www2.hawaii.edu/~facoba/readings/cofer.htm

And here: http://www.newyorker.com/magazine/1996/06/24/the-fourth-state-of-matter

And here: http://grammar.about.com/od/classicessays/a/strtwoolfessay_2.htm

Wednesday, December 3, 2014

If you were absent on 12/3

I handed out the bookmark below.  We read and tracked our thinking.  Tomorrow, we will do the same.  On Friday, we have the vocab quiz.  On Monday, it's discussion circles.



Tuesday, December 2, 2014

Dr. J Michael Bishop Extra Credit Assignment

I waited to post this so that I could share my Jekyll and Hyde essay with you.  It is a model of the authentic type of response that I'd like you to produce.

So, here's what I'm thinking.  We went and listened to a Nobel Prize winner share some information about cancer and his work.  As I was sitting there, trying, once again, to understand  the src gene, I was thinking about the idea that there was much more going on for all of us last night than just trying to make sense of difficult content.

From our discussion today, I have gathered that some of you are in awe of having been in the same room with a great scientific mind.  That is exciting!  I hope you were inspired to strive for that level of greatness in whichever field to which you choose to dedicate your life.  It doesn't have to be science.

But, let's be honest.  While some of us were able to glean bits of understanding, most of Dr. Bishop's presentation was incredibly sophisticated. And some of us, we hold no real fascination for the mutation of genes, Let's take it a step further: for some of you, pieces of the presentation may have triggered a mild case of Post Traumatic Stress Disorder that is the result of the summer reading and from which you might just have been beginning to heal, I get that.  Still, I'd like you to consider the whole experience, from the moment you surrendered your vehicle to the valet to the scarfing down of much water and cheese (did you see that table at the end of the night?) to the long sit of the presentation and write a personal essay that explores and evaluates the many facets of an experience like the one we had the opportunity to attend last night.

Real writing.  Real thinking. That is what I am looking for.

Monday, December 1, 2014

THIS JUST IN

J. Michael Bishop will be holding a special FHN only session at 3:30 today at the Van Andel Institute!!!!!!!!!!!!!!  I mean, I'll be there.  I hope you will be too.